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At first glance, here are some major problems I have:

1. "Itemfinder" is already the name of an Item (and a Key Item at that), so I HIGHLY doubt the staff will let that stick.
2. I don't quite understand how a RADAR Pokémon is capable of removing oxygen in a given area...
3. I like Detectyke's name, but Radon is just... blasé. I offer up the following: Radult (RADar + adULT), Supereveal (SUPErior + REVEAL), Diskitem (DISKover (discover) + ITEM), Mastect (MASTer + detECT)... I could probably keep going, but I think that last one is about all the good ones I can think of.
4. I dislike Detectyke's dexes, and they were kind of long anyway (the shortest was 98, and you hit the maximum with the other two). Instead, I offer these:

D1: It has a special organ inside its mouth that allows it to breath with very little air around. (89)
D2: A favorite of archaeologists, it can detect hidden items up to one mile below the surface. (90)
D3: It has the unusual ability to manipulate electricity using psychic powers to find items or people. (98)

I also think that Radon's (to use its current name) dexes could use a tweak or two:

D1: Its stronger electromagnetic field has allowed it to extend its searches to three miles underground. (100)
D2: It has a high success rate in finding lost things or people, making it a favorite for detectives. (97)
D3: Its wild attitude takes a skilled trainer to undo, and thus unskilled trainers should take care. (97)

5. Radon needs to have its move list revised; all moves after the ones it learns on evolving shouldn't be at the same levels as Detectyke's. No exceptions. Also, you should probably make moves other than the ones it already learned as Detectyke the "Move Tutor Memory" moves; use this as an example.

I don't think you get why I suggested the changes to Dex 1 of Detectyke's dexes: No one (except well read individuals) is going to know what a chromatophore is without going to look it up. One of my favorite college professors told me (and my class) time and again a rule to live by while writing: YOUR READER IS LAZY. They aren't going to want to go look up what a chromatophore is or why it makes sense that Detectyke has them or any of that.

You should just say something like: "A sensory organ made of reflective skin cells adorns its face, giving accurate position readouts." Much easier to understand, and only 97 characters long; in short, a darn good dex entry.

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Dex 2 for Detectyke sould be "archaeologists, it can detect" not "archaeologists. It can detect". It just flows better.

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I REALLY like Dex 3 for Detectyke; much more strongly worded than before.

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I still don't think Daron/Radon is very creative. Now it sounds like some guy I might meet on the subway. I strongly urge you to consider some of my previous suggestions, or else the Staff may come to this one and pick their own name for it.

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Move lists are much better; now they conform more closely to the guidelines we see set by Nintendo, and that's what PF is all about; getting as close to Nintendo without becoming it.

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Daron's Dex 2 is a little clunky; I think it'll be fine if you change "gross success rate" to "overall success rate". Alternatively, I made this one (its pretty much the same... just worded different): "Often used by authorities investigating missing persons cases. Their overall success rate is high." (98 Characters)

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I still thought Dex 3 for Daron could use some improvement, so I went and typed up this: "It won't listen to most trainers, except ones that prove themselves. Training it is difficult." (94 characters)

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If you'd like, PM me a description of them and I'll try to draw them up (no guarantees they'll look exactly like you imagined them). I'll be able to scan them in and PM them back to you as early as January 5th.