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ZeldaFan

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Mar 17 10 4:05 PM

Nice job! Those look great. Abilities could be Flame Body for Larvyre and Magma Armor for Pupyre. Not sure about height/weight though.

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patricol

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Mar 17 10 9:07 PM

Perfect! but we need more designs

My Suggestions:

Duckiducky (DS#037)
Rubbarvaz (DS#038)
Larvyre (Community DS#039)
Pupyre (Community DS#040)
Lepradu (DS#150)

Pollutross (DS #180)

Jibayuna (DS #199 Legendary Contest winner)

Bayubisa (DS #200 Legendary Contest winner)
Torchild
Lightorch
Destorch
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Coolsteph

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Mar 18 10 10:20 AM

Pyrefly is only ten pounds. (comparatively, Metapod is 21 pounds and Butterfree is 70 pounds.) Er...possibly eight or fourteen pounds? (the weight of the shell is shed upon evolution)

Since Metapod is only able to learn Harden (not counting Tackle and String Shot it kept after evolving from a Caterpie) perhaps Pupyre's single move is SmokeScreen? (Harden could be included, but cocoons tend to have limited movepools.) Although it is true that the Pokédex entries may allude to abilities and moves that the Pokémon does not actually have, such as poisonous abilities for Wooper, Togepi, and Umbreon.

Since I realized the veins of Pyrefly's wings are red, I changed the design of Pupyre.

patricol

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Mar 18 10 10:46 AM

I'll add your design, Ok?

My Suggestions:

Duckiducky (DS#037)
Rubbarvaz (DS#038)
Larvyre (Community DS#039)
Pupyre (Community DS#040)
Lepradu (DS#150)

Pollutross (DS #180)

Jibayuna (DS #199 Legendary Contest winner)

Bayubisa (DS #200 Legendary Contest winner)
Torchild
Lightorch
Destorch
Phashift(Community)

Coolsteph

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Posts: 1553

Mar 18 10 1:30 PM

A possible revision of your proposed Pokédex entries for Larvyre, patricol:

Larvyre spits lava to defend itself. Pokémon trying to eat it suffer burns.
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Larvyre moves slowly. Because of this, their parents often transport them.

If it seems worded oddly, it is only due to the character limit.

Miravistel

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Mar 18 10 5:14 PM

Pokémon Factory Worker

The dex info actually can (and should) be longer than that; those two are 75 and 74 characters, when the minimum dex length is 85 and the maximum is 100. Also, dexes never say "they" or "them,"only "it." Here's a reworked version of both dexes:

Larvyre spits a hot, lava-like fluid to defend itself, which burns any pokemon trying to eat it.
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Since it moves too slowly to flee, its parents will often carry it to safety if they sense danger.

I switched it to a "lava-like fluid" because Pyrefly doesn't suggest any connection to lava, just heat and fire, so I felt this fit the original concept a bit better.

Coolsteph

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Mar 18 10 5:40 PM

Thank you immensely, Miravistel. I was not aware that the DP entries actually allowed that many words, all I knew was that it was more limited than RS entries.

As for lava-like fluid--that is good, since Pyrefly does not have much of a connection to actual lava, as far as we know, so it is better that it is only lava-like fluid. But, that might mean Pupyre's entry needs re-wording. I assume that it will be changed to "the lava-like fluid it slathered on itself".

Since Larvyre and Pupyre seem to have mostly complete movesets now, is there anything else to be constructed for these two?

patricol

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Mar 18 10 8:37 PM

We have finished! Now the staff needs to review it!

My Suggestions:

Duckiducky (DS#037)
Rubbarvaz (DS#038)
Larvyre (Community DS#039)
Pupyre (Community DS#040)
Lepradu (DS#150)

Pollutross (DS #180)

Jibayuna (DS #199 Legendary Contest winner)

Bayubisa (DS #200 Legendary Contest winner)
Torchild
Lightorch
Destorch
Phashift(Community)

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Miravistel

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Mar 19 10 8:35 AM

Pokémon Factory Worker

Pupyre's first dex is too long now, so here's a revision that's a suitable length: As a Larvye, it slathered lava-like fluid onto its body, which hardened to form a rock-like shell.

Also, I noticed the new move Lava Spit seems to be based on Poison Sting, since it has the same Base Attack, PP and such. So since Poison Sting has a 30% chance of causing Poison status, maybe Lava Spit could have a 30% chance of causing a Burn?

Last Edited By: Miravistel Mar 19 10 8:41 AM. Edited 1 times.

patricol

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Mar 19 10 8:44 AM

Lava spit will be changed.

My Suggestions:

Duckiducky (DS#037)
Rubbarvaz (DS#038)
Larvyre (Community DS#039)
Pupyre (Community DS#040)
Lepradu (DS#150)

Pollutross (DS #180)

Jibayuna (DS #199 Legendary Contest winner)

Bayubisa (DS #200 Legendary Contest winner)
Torchild
Lightorch
Destorch
Phashift(Community)

Coolsteph

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Posts: 1553

Mar 19 10 9:16 AM

Larvyre's and Pupyre's Pokédex entries are great now, the moves are assigned, Lava Spit was fine-tuned, and the concept art is developed (technically I have another version of Pupyre, with a different pattern on the wing-like portion of the shell. But that would be an unnecessary hassle, and the current artwork is not too bad). Anything else, or do we just wait until the final review at this point?

patricol

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Mar 19 10 9:27 AM

Nothing else, we only need the staff to review them.

My Suggestions:

Duckiducky (DS#037)
Rubbarvaz (DS#038)
Larvyre (Community DS#039)
Pupyre (Community DS#040)
Lepradu (DS#150)

Pollutross (DS #180)

Jibayuna (DS #199 Legendary Contest winner)

Bayubisa (DS #200 Legendary Contest winner)
Torchild
Lightorch
Destorch
Phashift(Community)

Shining ShinE

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Posts: 7573

Mar 25 10 7:46 AM

PF Executive

Comments!

- We'd like Larvyre to have a HT of 1'00", like Caterpie and Weedle.
- We'd like to change Larvyre's special ability to Flash Fire.
- It'd be fair compared to the other cocoon-like pokémon if Pupyre has Smokescreen on both of its move slots, instead of learning Harden at level 7. Magma breaks easily anyway, so it's better to stick with just Smokescreen.
- We like the new move, so it will get approved along with these pokémon.
- New dex info, since DP-style dex info generally does not feature a pokémon's name or the formula "this pokémon":

Larvyre:
It spits a hot, lava-like fluid to defend itself. This will burn any Pokémon trying to eat it. (95)
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Since it moves too slowly to flee, its parents will often carry it to safety if they sense danger. (98)

Pupyre:
It slathered its lava like-fluid onto its body, which then hardened to form a rock-like shell. (95)
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If disturbed, it will spew smoke from the sides of its body. This startles its enemies. (87)

Can someone edit all this to the first page for me? Thanks!

Larvyre and Pupyre approved as #DS039-40.