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soble92

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Jun 25 08 1:19 PM

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Ok. Heres the deal. I believe that my story could use some improving OR should be redone altogether. I just need as much criticism as possible to get it right. Also, most new ideas from other people I'll consider. Please let the truth come to light for my Hero of Darkness tale.

Edit: I forgot to mention. When you say what a problem is that you can't stand regarding Hero of Darkness, please explain why it should be changed. Otherwise, I'll ignore it.

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MisterSmeargle

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Jun 25 08 1:46 PM

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*glares*

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Jun 27 08 1:37 AM

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Mind explaining the story, that'd help.

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Jun 27 08 3:28 AM

Oh right. A group of pokemon are gathering mystical orbs of power to defeat Exodus. Many legendaries are there to assist us or fight against us under Exodus' control. There is the heroes of fire, water, life, zen, aura, earth, air, thunder, light, and darkness. Each hero eventually possesses these orbs. Each orb has a bonus attack that only the user can use.

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Jun 27 08 1:05 PM

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Right, just get rid of it, it has nothing to do with the story.

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Jun 27 08 6:30 PM

Orbs are basically keys with powers. Once all the orbs are collected, we can enter Exodus's lair. However the orbs giving special moves is kind of a bonus. Remember Orbs can be hard to get.

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Jun 28 08 4:33 AM

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But it has NOTHING to do with the storyline set down by the Staff!

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Jun 28 08 5:17 AM

MS, what is the "storyline" by the staff? I thought we can make our own.

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Jun 28 08 5:45 AM

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Yes but there's a sort of general storyline you have to follow. Exodus doesn't have a lair accessed by a bunch of orbs, so you can't have that in the story. And Jirachi doesn't appear to random Pokémon either. You have to start off in Manifold Forest and then, for some reason, you set off in search of the source of the Shadow Pokémon. Eventually, at some point, one of the PF Staff will contact you about Exodus and then that will be your main concern.

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Jun 28 08 6:38 AM

Thanks. That helps a lot. But I do have one question. Does exodus have like his own dimension or something that can only be opened by "magic?" Where is he located at the end of people's rpgs?

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Jun 28 08 7:17 AM

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Exodus was banished by the Staff to an alternate dimension, a realm of nothingness in which it could not harm anyone any more. It somehow managed to escape (perhaps the parallel dimension wasn't as empty as the Staff thought it to be), and it established a base somewhere in Bombur. As of yet, we haven't set a definitive location, though. Actually, the storyline for the free spirits is a bit looser than the one for trainers, so you get a bit more freedom. But some of the rules of the main RPG still apply, like no encounters with legendary pokémon, so what MisterSmeargle said regarding Jirachi is true. I can't tell you about the acceptability the orbs of power, but I'm sure that once Bonzai reviews your storyline he will tell you what to do.

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Jun 28 08 9:11 AM

Cool. So, should the staff delete my story and I start all over? I was kind of thinking to start fresh with the suggestions made by ms and the staff. Oh, and also, can we fight shadow legendarys?

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Jun 28 08 10:44 AM

MisterSmeargle wrote:
Yes but there's a sort of general storyline you have to follow. Exodus doesn't have a lair accessed by a bunch of orbs, so you can't have that in the story. And Jirachi doesn't appear to random Pokémon either. You have to start off in Manifold Forest and then, for some reason, you set off in search of the source of the Shadow Pokémon. Eventually, at some point, one of the PF Staff will contact you about Exodus and then that will be your main concern.

Thanks, I never knew that(I wouldn't of put Jirachi in there if I had known that).

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Jun 28 08 1:33 PM

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It's not necessary to delete your story, you can just start over and the previous topic would be locked. Shadow legendaries count as legendary encounters as well, so I'm afraid that can't be done without permission.

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Jun 28 08 4:28 PM

Can you rephrase about how to restart?

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Jun 28 08 4:39 PM

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Make a new thread and the other will be locked.

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Jun 29 08 3:32 AM

AHHHHHH. I see. Done deal.

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Jun 29 08 8:51 AM

The only problem is, for the people who joined, they have a topic for their own characters, so what happens then? The topic is locked due to them switching over to another story, but if that story was deleted, then what happens?

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Jun 29 08 9:39 AM

I already made a new set of characters for this storyline. It'll be fine.

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Jun 29 08 12:10 PM

I'm talking about my people. They came from other people, other topics, their topic was closed because of the transfer. So if my story was closed due to transfer, the story is restarted, & I want to keep my characters, what do I do?

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Jun 29 08 12:44 PM

Huh. Well... I already had combinations in mind before even starting the original one. I'm not quite sure what to do. I guess fern can join again, but not lead.

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